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Sunday, 8 May 2011




To the world

By hannii (Age 11)

Hi!!, I wrote a poem a couple of days ago called To the world,  does anybody think its good?


To The world,

If you see no hope, smile,

if all you do is mope, smile,

if you see no way ,

through night and day,

and people won't let you have your say,

don't run about,

don't scream and shout,

Just listen to me,

 and you willsee,

the world will be okay!





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  • KiwiCat (Age 13) wrote on Thursday, 7 October 2010 @ 16:35

    That is great!

  • kizzie (Age 14) wrote on Thursday, 7 October 2010 @ 19:29

    cool ice lolly ice lolly melting away ice loly ice lolly been waiting all day ice lolly ice lolly days drifting by ice lolly ice lolly bye bye i wrote that poem and it was published in a book

  • ChooChoo (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 8 October 2010 @ 09:42

    |I think it's good!

  • ChooChoo (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 8 October 2010 @ 09:43

    Did you write it at home or at school?

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 8 October 2010 @ 19:08

    I wrote it at home, I like writing poems, see.

  • rockgirl (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 8 October 2010 @ 19:51

    well done!

  • Mirri04 (Age 13) wrote on Friday, 8 October 2010 @ 20:31

    That's a really sweet poem:)

  • gummybear (Age 10) wrote on Friday, 8 October 2010 @ 22:01

    its really good i think you could be an author when your older if you want to

  • redhorse10 (Age 14) wrote on Sunday, 10 October 2010 @ 11:40

    Cool!

  • chocdragon (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 13 October 2010 @ 19:18

    i love that poem!

  • Lizziexxx (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 14 October 2010 @ 16:42

    I LIKE WRITING POEMS!! i have had two published recently

  • Lizziexxx (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 14 October 2010 @ 16:43

    I LIKE WRITING POEMS!! i have had two published recently.. btw brill poem!!!!

  • chocdragon (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 17 October 2010 @ 09:12

    i have had two published recently as well!!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 21 October 2010 @ 18:11

    I had one published two years ago

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 23 October 2010 @ 06:46

    Ive never had any of my poems published, but im hoping to soon....

  • superspy10 (Age 11) wrote on Sunday, 24 October 2010 @ 19:14

    That is really good!

  • SuperSuze (Age 13) wrote on Wednesday, 27 October 2010 @ 10:42

    I love your poem!!!

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 27 October 2010 @ 17:33

    thanks!!!

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 30 October 2010 @ 14:17

    Hey, does anybody know if they want to be an auther or poet when theyr'e older? I ceartainly do!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 3 November 2010 @ 18:33

    I do! I really do!

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 13 November 2010 @ 18:50

    Good for u!!!

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 13 November 2010 @ 18:51

    I mean, it's a cool job....

  • SuperSuze (Age 13) wrote on Tuesday, 16 November 2010 @ 16:50

    I want to be an author! I wrote a story called the Impossible Village, it's somewhere on the website.

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 17 November 2010 @ 17:08

    OOhh, sounds interesting!!!!

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Tuesday, 23 November 2010 @ 18:31

    There is nothing better than writing a poem and being proud of it, don't you think??

  • chocdragon (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 6 December 2010 @ 16:57

    I really want to be an author. I'm glad a few people share my passion!!!

  • sarahsun1 (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 23 December 2010 @ 17:35

    wow thats cool

  • LionLover (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 19 January 2011 @ 15:22

    I like it a lot. I've also always wanted to be an author.

  • Catlover78 (Age 10) wrote on Friday, 4 February 2011 @ 18:14

    I love poetry. You are really talented. Well done!

  • Lizziexxx (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 8 February 2011 @ 10:06

    I am voting for u for the writers thingy on first news hannii

  • Lizziexxx (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 8 February 2011 @ 10:06

    I am voting for u for the writers thingy on first news hannii

  • heathy (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 11 February 2011 @ 14:22

    Wow almost everyone has had their poems published! I wish I was good enough to have something published. I agree with catlover78 you're extremely talented.

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 18 February 2011 @ 17:55

    Thanks, but don't feel left out. None of my work has ever been published.

  • puppy8 (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 20 February 2011 @ 16:56

    WOW!,hannii that is gr8 xx

  • puppy8 (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 20 February 2011 @ 16:56

    do you have a fave poem??

  • rhianna9 (Age 10) wrote on Monday, 21 February 2011 @ 11:59

    Gr8!!!!!!

  • Anya2000 (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 26 February 2011 @ 08:01

    I want too be an author

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 11 March 2011 @ 18:07

    I think that anyone can be what they want to do, if they believe and try.

  • Ejc (Age 10) wrote on Saturday, 2 April 2011 @ 19:10

    I LIKED IT

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 6 April 2011 @ 17:30

    I really enjoy poetry.Do any of u guys????

  • smileybear (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 11 April 2011 @ 17:54

    The poem is absolutely awesome! Yo should write some more poems. :)

  • cateXxX (Age 14) wrote on Tuesday, 12 April 2011 @ 13:55

    That's really good I got my poem published it was about the lack of clean water in the poorest of towns

  • amberlily (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 13 April 2011 @ 16:49

    cool!

  • hollykind (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 20 April 2011 @ 21:43

    sounds good

  • rhianna9 (Age 10) wrote on Sunday, 8 May 2011 @ 09:01

    It is VERY good!

  • Ejc (Age 10) wrote on Monday, 9 May 2011 @ 17:21

    well i know i commented about it before but i must have had a brain problem because i dont know what all the fuss is about

  • heathy (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 11 May 2011 @ 19:15

    wow thats amazing and a brilliant + an VERY important subject.

  • Ejc (Age 10) wrote on Thursday, 26 May 2011 @ 20:22

    sorry about my comment before it must of hurt your feelings its quite good but i wouldnt of had smile twice

  • cami3171 (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 27 May 2011 @ 18:54

    That is really good. *****

  • Swim21 (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 4 June 2011 @ 20:59

    Thats really good

  • fly_girl (Age 13) wrote on Wednesday, 6 July 2011 @ 17:18

    Very inspiring :-)

  • kitsunela (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 16 July 2011 @ 09:37

    Lovely poem, very inspiring. You should ask Nicky the editor to e-mail it to Barack Obama, it would no doubt motivate him a great deal.

  • fishii10 (Age 14) wrote on Wednesday, 3 August 2011 @ 10:41

    Short, but it gets across a very passionate message. You've made it onto my sneeze page at #5.

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 20 August 2011 @ 15:18

    Ejc, Its okay, after all, if I didn't get any negative comments, how would I know how to improve??

  • fly_girl (Age 13) wrote on Friday, 16 September 2011 @ 17:40

    uplifting

  • CHERUB15 (Age 13) wrote on Wednesday, 21 September 2011 @ 18:34

    Fab makes you feel happy inside!

  • Crystal- (Age 13) wrote on Wednesday, 26 October 2011 @ 15:21

    Thts so good.

  • Bunnycat (Age 13) wrote on Thursday, 10 November 2011 @ 21:39

    That is really really good!!! :D

  • Wallie (Age 13) wrote on Saturday, 3 December 2011 @ 14:03

    Amazing!!! How do u get poems published? i had one at primary in Young Writers, but that was through school

  • pipapip (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 26 December 2011 @ 17:45

    BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Bunnycat (Age 13) wrote on Monday, 13 February 2012 @ 15:18

    I just read another of your poems, you really have a flair for poetry. Well done!

  • animals1 (Age 13) wrote on Monday, 13 February 2012 @ 18:42

    WOW! AMAZING! I wish I could do that!xx

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Monday, 20 February 2012 @ 17:25

    Thx!!!

  • Trainzboy (Age 10) wrote on Thursday, 5 April 2012 @ 19:16

    i am her brother , and it is on her door. the first words are: to my brother.

  • pipapip (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 8 April 2012 @ 07:47

    No offence or anything to poetry lovers, but I am RUBBISH at poetry and I personally hate it cos I can never get any rhymes but everyone else in my class can...:(

  • CrazyCoco (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 11 April 2012 @ 12:07

    pipapip, you're not the only one who's rubbish at poetry... I am too! BTW, this poem is fantastic, Hannii!! X

  • pianostar2 (Age 10) wrote on Thursday, 12 April 2012 @ 09:29

    I think it's very motivating for people that think life isn't fair

  • pianostar2 (Age 10) wrote on Thursday, 12 April 2012 @ 09:29

    I think it's very motivating for people that think life isn't fair

  • vivk1 (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 14 April 2012 @ 22:05

    That's a really good poem, well done!