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Friday, 6 May 2011




My Writing

By laurcool (Age 12)

This is a poem I've written. If you want to hear more, just comment and I'll write one of my short stories. This is called The School of Nightmares. 

    Beware of the School of Nightmares,

    It’s logo an angry face,

    You’ll feel terror and anxiety,

    As you enter through the front gates.

You’ll receive an unfriendly welcome:

I hope you loathe your stay.

A prudent ghost will lead you

And show you the terrifying way.

Cobwebs are enfolding you

And spiders crawl the walls,

The hideous teacher:

Your name she will call.

She will take you to the classroom,

The ghost has fits of ire

You stand, observing

The ghost as she lifts the flames of fire.

Malignant laughter

Echoes through the rooms,

You are petrified,

This

       Is

         Your 

                 Doom.

Thank you and I hope you like it! 




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  • gummybear (Age 10) wrote on Wednesday, 20 October 2010 @ 17:32

    thats brilliant well done

  • Lizziexxx (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 21 October 2010 @ 16:48

    that..is..AWESOME!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 21 October 2010 @ 17:58

    thanks

  • superspy10 (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 22 October 2010 @ 16:52

    I think you should be a poet when you are older!!!

  • LOLOLOL (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 22 October 2010 @ 18:13

    OMG that was SOOOOO good!!!!!!! do u wanna be a writer when ur older?i do! if u want i will make an article with some of the story i'm writing in it.

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 22 October 2010 @ 19:32

    I do want to be one! :)

  • hannii (Age 11) wrote on Sunday, 24 October 2010 @ 12:46

    cool!!! So you write poems too? welcome to the club!!!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 24 October 2010 @ 15:03

    Yes! I'd love to see some of your writing!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 24 October 2010 @ 16:45

    Yes! I love writing!!!!!!

  • Ponies (Age 15) wrote on Sunday, 24 October 2010 @ 20:56

    wow! thats really good!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 25 October 2010 @ 19:48

    Thank you! I just came up with another story idea and I might make another article about it.

  • SuperSuze (Age 13) wrote on Tuesday, 26 October 2010 @ 19:39

    Great poem thumbs up

  • superspy10 (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 27 October 2010 @ 18:20

    Welcome to the club of poets!:)

  • SuperSuze (Age 13) wrote on Thursday, 28 October 2010 @ 10:48

    i might put a poem on the website i am also waiting for a story i wrote to be put on the website

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 28 October 2010 @ 19:47

    Thank you all! Btw I entered the poem in a competition. Fingers crossed!!!

  • cowmoo1170 (Age 10) wrote on Friday, 29 October 2010 @ 20:54

    Pretty good but I would love to hear some more of your poems!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 30 October 2010 @ 13:30

    I will! I have a subscription to the Young Writers magazine every month, so maybe every month I'll write a new one.

  • sweetpea (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 30 October 2010 @ 14:57

    .mouth wide open!. My goodness that is better than an a poets poem! Your a natural poet! Well done! Keep up the good work!

  • Mirri04 (Age 13) wrote on Saturday, 30 October 2010 @ 16:35

    Amazing poem;it chilled me to the bone!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 31 October 2010 @ 11:45

    Thanks! I just wrote an article called My Writing 2 with a poem called No Goodbyes on it. Hopefully it will be approved!

  • SuperSuze (Age 13) wrote on Sunday, 31 October 2010 @ 15:00

    good luck

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 1 November 2010 @ 16:59

    It's approved! please visit it! Thanks.

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 2 November 2010 @ 18:34

    Hi again! Thank you for all your comments! :)

  • chocdragon (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 3 November 2010 @ 18:26

    I have seen Young Writers. It's good isn't it?

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 3 November 2010 @ 18:34

    I made an article called I need YOUR help. Please read it thanks!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 5 November 2010 @ 17:24

    It is great!

  • LionLover (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 19 November 2010 @ 16:42

    It is great laurcool!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 24 November 2010 @ 17:48

    Thank you! :)

  • rhianna9 (Age 10) wrote on Saturday, 27 November 2010 @ 16:54

    Great i like it very much!!! your a great writer!!!!!!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 29 November 2010 @ 15:47

    Thank you!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 4 December 2010 @ 14:04

    | want to make an article with all my writing article links but i forgot how i want to make a sneeze page

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 8 December 2010 @ 16:39

    Maybe not...

  • LOLOLOL (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 10 December 2010 @ 16:09

    i love writing i'm gonna make an article with some of mine l8r be sure to check it out!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 13 December 2010 @ 18:56

    Ok what's it called?

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 14 December 2010 @ 16:41

    ?

  • sarahsun1 (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 23 December 2010 @ 17:16

    Wow that was good! I like poetry as well and one of my poems got published in a Young Writers Book!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 29 December 2010 @ 12:52

    When I was 8 I got my poem called My Favourite Things published in a collection of poems book for Young Writers.

  • naturegirl (Age 10) wrote on Monday, 3 January 2011 @ 10:37

    Thats great laurcool

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 5 January 2011 @ 19:45

    Thank you :)

  • Hajra444 (Age 9) wrote on Saturday, 8 January 2011 @ 21:39

    you could use that poem for the Haiku comp

  • Ellie-mo (Age 13) wrote on Sunday, 16 January 2011 @ 11:43

    OMG!! That's really good! u should be a writer when you're older

  • sneha (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 19 January 2011 @ 21:24

    This is really good!

  • sneha (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 19 January 2011 @ 21:24

    This is really good!

  • merry (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 4 February 2011 @ 20:01

    O.M.G. That is amasing I want to be a poet when I grow up to

  • liljen2001 (Age 10) wrote on Saturday, 5 February 2011 @ 12:45

    That was absolutely fab-dabby-dosey!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • heathy (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 11 February 2011 @ 14:14

    Oh wow your an amazing poet I like to write aswell but I'm no where near as good as you. You'll make a great career out of it.

  • Simo (Age 13) wrote on Saturday, 12 February 2011 @ 09:57

    That's cool

  • D-amazing (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 17 February 2011 @ 18:20

    As much as I shouldn't envy you as my best friend, I could just about cry because of the difference between your writing skills and mine. I WANT YOUR WRITING KNOWLEDGE!!!!!

  • elle-bee (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 18 February 2011 @ 16:44

    what is ire?

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 18 February 2011 @ 18:13

    Ire is rage. Like fury Thanks d-amazing!

  • puppy8 (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 19 February 2011 @ 09:33

    that was great xxxxx

  • simba99 (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 22 February 2011 @ 18:07

    that is excellent!!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 24 February 2011 @ 19:37

    Thank you!

  • bb77 (Age 13) wrote on Saturday, 26 February 2011 @ 17:30

    Wow!!! :-)

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 28 February 2011 @ 16:27

    Thanks again!

  • merry (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 12 March 2011 @ 17:50

    laurcool You are and amazing poet would you like me to put a poem that I wrote as a bored article. If you do just tell me. merry.

  • divefan (Age 13) wrote on Sunday, 13 March 2011 @ 12:18

    gr8!

  • Mop (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 17 March 2011 @ 21:50

    Well done that was very good.

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 21 March 2011 @ 18:16

    Thanks

  • cami3171 (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 8 April 2011 @ 20:12

    Do another one ........ pleaseeeee!!! :)

  • millieboo (Age 10) wrote on Saturday, 9 April 2011 @ 19:03

    woooooo thats good. (i like your avatar!)

  • emscoco (Age 11) wrote on Wednesday, 13 April 2011 @ 19:27

    Awesome maybe more pics and make the poem colorful and bright. All and all very good writing. I love it!

  • chocdragon (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 14 April 2011 @ 08:37

    Wowzers!! I want to be an author when I'm older. :)

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 15 April 2011 @ 19:06

    Thankss for the nice comments! :)

  • millieboo (Age 10) wrote on Friday, 22 April 2011 @ 17:00

    i like it but the subject is a bit boring

  • Nintate (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 25 April 2011 @ 16:52

    I ♥ That Poem!! You are an AMAZING Wtiter!! :) :) xx

  • Nintate (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 25 April 2011 @ 16:52

    I ♥ That Poem!! You are an AMAZING Wtiter!! :) :) xx

  • berrypie5 (Age 10) wrote on Saturday, 30 April 2011 @ 11:19

    That poems fab! i would love to write as well as that! GO YOU!!!

  • famous5 (Age 11) wrote on Saturday, 30 April 2011 @ 18:57

    great poem, it made the hairs on the back of my neck stand up on end!!!!!!!xxx p.s: you are an AMAZING writer!!!!xxxxxx

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 1 May 2011 @ 15:54

    Thanks!

  • MissC (Age 15) wrote on Monday, 2 May 2011 @ 18:58

    You deserve all the praise everyone else has given you, that was really good, i love it! I'd really love it if you put some more poems on the website!! I'm quite jealous cause none of my poems are that good! xx

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 4 May 2011 @ 19:08

    Thank you MissC! I do like poetry but recently I haven't written much. I've written more stories recently.

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 6 May 2011 @ 17:04

    Nic: please can you put this article in the Creative Writing section? Thanks!

  • nwilliams wrote on Friday, 6 May 2011 @ 17:06

    Of course. Thank you for telling me where this was :)

  • looby99 (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 6 May 2011 @ 18:12

    R u realy 10

  • RainbowRae (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 6 May 2011 @ 20:05

    that is fantastic

  • kitkat88 (Age 13) wrote on Friday, 6 May 2011 @ 20:23

    Epic.

  • lillie1144 (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 7 May 2011 @ 12:05

    That poem is awesome its brilliant! WELL DONE!

  • amberlily (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 7 May 2011 @ 14:09

    cool!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 7 May 2011 @ 17:45

    Thanks! Yes I am 10 but I'm 11 VERY soon! :)

  • Emi_Narnia (Age 15) wrote on Sunday, 8 May 2011 @ 14:05

    hahaha it's awesome :)

  • CandyEllz (Age 11) wrote on Sunday, 8 May 2011 @ 19:10

    Nice!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 7 June 2011 @ 18:19

    Thanks for your great comments!

  • youtube (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 7 June 2011 @ 20:49

    great poem

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 8 June 2011 @ 16:39

    Thanks!

  • eke (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 8 June 2011 @ 17:08

    It was great. Please read my Ghost ship story!

  • eke (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 8 June 2011 @ 17:09

    It was great. Please read my Ghost ship story!

  • wispa1 (Age 8) wrote on Wednesday, 8 June 2011 @ 17:21

    SUPER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • hollykind (Age 11) wrote on Thursday, 9 June 2011 @ 19:53

    cool

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 10 June 2011 @ 20:02

    ok!

  • pixie2605 (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 10 June 2011 @ 21:21

    cool

  • Mattanna11 (Age 11) wrote on Friday, 17 June 2011 @ 18:36

    Love that!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Wednesday, 22 June 2011 @ 16:41

    Thank you for all the great comments!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 1 July 2011 @ 18:04

    :)

  • mangomog (Age 11) wrote on Monday, 4 July 2011 @ 10:29

    AMAZING!!!!!!!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 5 July 2011 @ 17:47

    Thanks again! :)

  • KahrisK (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 16 July 2011 @ 22:15

    Whoa! Omg, O.o its-thats-Omg! That Rocks!

  • neemtree (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 21 July 2011 @ 18:45

    That is a great poem! I write poems too!

  • fishii10 (Age 14) wrote on Monday, 25 July 2011 @ 18:53

    Lost for words. It's better than a lot of things I've done. I should really post some of the things I've done.

  • ojn9 (Age 10) wrote on Wednesday, 27 July 2011 @ 10:05

    brill

  • charan (Age 13) wrote on Saturday, 30 July 2011 @ 10:18

    That was great! My sister will have a 'mini saga' published in a Young Writers' book! My teacher is forgetful- she didn't tell my form about the competition! :(

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 7 August 2011 @ 14:43

    Hi charan! I was ging to enter that comp but I found it really hard to write a story in 50 words! Thanks for the great comments again!! :)

  • GirlAbroad (Age 11) wrote on Thursday, 11 August 2011 @ 16:28

    Brill- you are a genius!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 12 August 2011 @ 16:24

    thanks :)

  • nicpick (Age 9) wrote on Sunday, 28 August 2011 @ 18:46

    yes i agree he is a genius

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 5 September 2011 @ 18:11

    thanks I'm a girl btw XD

  • Ninja75 (Age 13) wrote on Friday, 14 October 2011 @ 17:24

    Wow! Awesome! Ninja

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 31 October 2011 @ 16:07

    Thanks :)

  • TheJuice (Age 14) wrote on Tuesday, 15 November 2011 @ 22:22

    This is just amazing... words cannot describe this masterpiece...

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 2 December 2011 @ 17:53

    THanksDD

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 2 December 2011 @ 17:54

    I mean thanks :)

  • Wallie (Age 13) wrote on Saturday, 3 December 2011 @ 13:56

    Stunning! how do u do it!!! :-)

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 9 December 2011 @ 17:18

    Thanks :) It just came to me :)

  • maddy13 (Age 9) wrote on Saturday, 17 December 2011 @ 11:54

    I

  • maddy13 (Age 9) wrote on Saturday, 17 December 2011 @ 11:56

    Want to be a writer and a journlist, ans if you want to you could be a writer, hands down, you R amazing!

  • Bunnycat (Age 13) wrote on Wednesday, 21 December 2011 @ 14:30

    That is really good! I subscribed to Young Writer magazine too, but as you probably know unless you stopped subscribing, it closed down. But there is another good magazine called Wordsmith, I have had my first issue and it seems to be good so far.

  • ROCKINROLL (Age 10) wrote on Wednesday, 8 February 2012 @ 18:41

    AUSOME!! hey bunny cat can u tell me the website for this wordsmith thing because i am ito writing stuff and i want to be famous at the same time!!

  • buzzer (Age 10) wrote on Saturday, 11 February 2012 @ 18:09

    Brilliant poem. My bet is you will become a poet. Just aspire to be a poet if you want and if not, you've still got the talent pf writing amazin poems.

  • CrazyCoco (Age 12) wrote on Sunday, 11 March 2012 @ 16:12

    If this was Facebook you would have a million kazillion billion zillion likes! You're awesome, and your poem totally rocks!!

  • wispa1 (Age 8) wrote on Monday, 26 March 2012 @ 18:03

    I love your poem! Its great!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Tuesday, 27 March 2012 @ 16:13

    Thanks for the great comments guys, I'm glad you like it ;D

  • amberh0909 (Age 12) wrote on Saturday, 31 March 2012 @ 20:16

    i could never write anything like that so well done :)

  • Unicyclist (Age 12) wrote on Monday, 2 April 2012 @ 16:57

    I like it a lot! I hope it isn't my doom!!!!

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Thursday, 12 April 2012 @ 18:26

    Thanks Unicyclist and amberh0909! I just posted some writing tips I'll be doing every week. I'll post the link when it's approved! ;D

  • pianostar2 (Age 10) wrote on Friday, 13 April 2012 @ 17:47

    That's really scary... ...MUMMY

  • laurcool (Age 12) wrote on Friday, 20 April 2012 @ 20:04

    http://www.firstnews.co.uk/bored/writing-tips-1-i14609/commented

  • Lizziecool (Age 9) wrote on Friday, 11 May 2012 @ 17:05

    How do you write a article